tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-606209712314101104.post464953693730240346..comments2023-12-26T18:33:04.681-08:00Comments on Writability: Fixing the First Page Feature Giveaway #13Gabe (Ava Jae)http://www.blogger.com/profile/04778524723148508140noreply@blogger.comBlogger28125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-606209712314101104.post-54498168329414333712015-07-21T18:22:33.492-07:002015-07-21T18:22:33.492-07:00I'd use the critique on my YA manuscript.I'd use the critique on my YA manuscript.Jessica Vaskonoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-606209712314101104.post-14050807674967094992015-07-21T13:39:28.449-07:002015-07-21T13:39:28.449-07:00Thanks so much for this opportunity, Ava. Editor f...Thanks so much for this opportunity, Ava. Editor feedback is the best way for me to learn. I'm hoping to sub this mss to Entangled (Bliss) when it's finished.margie stewartnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-606209712314101104.post-26079703849750938002015-07-21T09:08:03.246-07:002015-07-21T09:08:03.246-07:00My first page needs help! Would love to win this c...My first page needs help! Would love to win this critique.Debra Daughertynoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-606209712314101104.post-40248963588115077572015-07-21T07:39:19.475-07:002015-07-21T07:39:19.475-07:00How did I not know about this comp? I've just ...How did I not know about this comp? I've just changed my opening scene to show for the first and only time the antagonist/eventual romantic interest's p.o.v. in order to up the conflict - before I opened with the protagonist and it just wasn't working for me. I think it works better but it introduces other issues, so crit would be fantastic.Katnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-606209712314101104.post-760647516267601862015-07-21T07:38:59.978-07:002015-07-21T07:38:59.978-07:00Yay! Good luck! :)Yay! Good luck! :)Ava Jaehttp://avajae.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-606209712314101104.post-75866995311053095952015-07-21T07:38:37.208-07:002015-07-21T07:38:37.208-07:00Welcome to Writability, Emily! Glad you found your...Welcome to Writability, Emily! Glad you found your way here. :) <br /><br /><br />That sounds like a great reason to get a first page crit—good luck!Ava Jaehttp://avajae.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-606209712314101104.post-52249785143406990272015-07-21T07:37:41.367-07:002015-07-21T07:37:41.367-07:00I'm glad you stumbled across it this time, Ame...I'm glad you stumbled across it this time, Amelia! Good luck! :)Ava Jaehttp://avajae.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-606209712314101104.post-40916175788956031122015-07-21T07:36:21.532-07:002015-07-21T07:36:21.532-07:00Aw yay! So excited for this! I've changed the ...Aw yay! So excited for this! I've changed the opening page of my YA F so would love feedback!Tanvi Berwahnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-606209712314101104.post-60470593185143631582015-07-21T05:59:34.375-07:002015-07-21T05:59:34.375-07:00Just found you through Janice Hardy's Fiction ...Just found you through Janice Hardy's Fiction University specifically because I'm trying to figure out why my first pages aren't getting positive responses from literary agents ... I'm psyched for this!Emily Wenstromhttp://www.creativejuicer.wordpress.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-606209712314101104.post-57321398761670055372015-07-20T11:47:09.385-07:002015-07-20T11:47:09.385-07:00Man, how come I didn't know about this generou...Man, how come I didn't know about this generous crit the first 12 times? Well, maybe 13 will be the lucky number, for me and for my NA romantic suspense MS. Fingers crossed.Amelia Creednoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-606209712314101104.post-6948779644232397752015-07-19T03:05:15.844-07:002015-07-19T03:05:15.844-07:00Yay! Thanks, Julia! It's been a fun feature to...Yay! Thanks, Julia! It's been a fun feature to host. :) Good luck!Ava Jaehttp://avajae.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-606209712314101104.post-15177705469972174592015-07-19T03:04:54.406-07:002015-07-19T03:04:54.406-07:00Ha ha sounds like a plan. :) Good luck, Juniper!Ha ha sounds like a plan. :) Good luck, Juniper!Ava Jaehttp://avajae.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-606209712314101104.post-65074598165452222022015-07-19T03:04:43.875-07:002015-07-19T03:04:43.875-07:00Awesome! Good luck, Giselle!Awesome! Good luck, Giselle!Ava Jaehttp://avajae.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-606209712314101104.post-2873737923684456672015-07-19T03:02:44.436-07:002015-07-19T03:02:44.436-07:00Yay! I love your critique posts. So helpful! Plus,...Yay! I love your critique posts. So helpful! Plus, I love seeing what other people are working on! ^_^Julia E.noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-606209712314101104.post-34419326333213023692015-07-18T13:30:10.275-07:002015-07-18T13:30:10.275-07:00Wheee I'm gonna keep doing these intil my YA F...Wheee I'm gonna keep doing these intil my YA Fantasy is chosen :-PJuniper Nicholshttp://www.junipernichols.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-606209712314101104.post-43921872292111388132015-07-18T06:49:55.443-07:002015-07-18T06:49:55.443-07:00It's my first time entering one of these becau...It's my first time entering one of these because I feel like I finally have a worthy 250 first page excerpt. It's YA magical realism.Giselle Abreunoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-606209712314101104.post-51013547402198225602015-07-18T03:22:35.007-07:002015-07-18T03:22:35.007-07:00Ha ha thanks, David! It's been a fun feature f...Ha ha thanks, David! It's been a fun feature for sure. :)Ava Jaehttp://avajae.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-606209712314101104.post-36468607905807886762015-07-18T03:22:05.105-07:002015-07-18T03:22:05.105-07:00Thank you, Gwen! I think you're totally right ...Thank you, Gwen! I think you're totally right that every crit can reveal something new. Good luck!Ava Jaehttp://avajae.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-606209712314101104.post-22511407888909673122015-07-18T03:21:38.892-07:002015-07-18T03:21:38.892-07:00Yay! I'm so excited that you're so excited...Yay! I'm so excited that you're so excited! :) Good luck, Ophelia!Ava Jaehttp://avajae.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-606209712314101104.post-37202349572876380592015-07-18T03:21:18.055-07:002015-07-18T03:21:18.055-07:00That sounds cool! Good luck, Ashley!That sounds cool! Good luck, Ashley!Ava Jaehttp://avajae.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-606209712314101104.post-31996831771572366972015-07-18T03:21:06.586-07:002015-07-18T03:21:06.586-07:00Well, first and foremost, welcome to Writability! ...Well, first and foremost, welcome to Writability! :) If you have any questions, please don't hesitate to ask. <br /><br /><br />And good luck with the giveaway!Ava Jaehttp://avajae.blogspot.com/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-606209712314101104.post-22236334038864124142015-07-17T21:58:25.922-07:002015-07-17T21:58:25.922-07:00Oh my gravy. I want to steal this wonderfully fun ...Oh my gravy. I want to steal this wonderfully fun approach. Straight up, I love this uniquely generous (monthly) gift to writers. Good stuff!David Villalvahttp://storyandcraft.netnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-606209712314101104.post-18991533676296185852015-07-17T16:10:58.202-07:002015-07-17T16:10:58.202-07:00Yay! I love getting crits because each one reveals...Yay! I love getting crits because each one reveals something new and you know what you're talking about.Gwen Tolioshttp://www.gwentoliosblog.net/noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-606209712314101104.post-44590070118087586302015-07-17T15:23:18.157-07:002015-07-17T15:23:18.157-07:00I am so excited about this!! I would love to win! ...I am so excited about this!! I would love to win! I would use my fantasy/adventure MS because I've been working so hard on it and some feedback would be great! ;) Thank you!Ophelia Leongnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-606209712314101104.post-87295411263948382972015-07-17T13:49:38.309-07:002015-07-17T13:49:38.309-07:00I think I'd pick my NA sci-fi/post-apocalyptic...I think I'd pick my NA sci-fi/post-apocalyptic this time. It's near and dear to my heart because it's very heavily influenced by video game storytelling <3Ashley Rhttp://www.amruggirello.comnoreply@blogger.com